Expert Kinetics (Talisman)

[Zora]

I think Kira's ready for Expert. I did all of nano at Journeyman so there's a lot of kinetics usage I can point to

here's some threads showcasing her skill usage:

Crushing people too death, basically all out combat to prove how strong she is

Hurling motorcycles and fighting

Lifting an entire car in a fight

blowing up zombies

dealing with nuisances

[Talisman]

Hi Kira,

Thank you for submitting your threads for perusal!

I've gone through the threads you've supplied as examples (and I appreciated the knitting joke), but I'm sorry to say that I don't think what you've provided here are sufficient examples for expert Kinetics.

These skill requests are a way for staff to evaluate your understanding of the skill, arcane or mundane. We need to see that you know and understand the nuances involved with the craft, and how you are applying them in your threads, and that you can utilize them at a high degree. It's not just the character's physical limits that you're pushing - which is also important - but the limits of your knowledge and understanding with the concepts.

What I was really looking for here was detailing of technique and the interaction with the Aether Flux. Your fourth thread, in which you utilized the technique of Splintering, got the closest to what I was hoping to see. As a journeyman, you have a number of techniques at your disposal, and I would have liked to have seen you combine them to consistently demonstrate your understanding of the skill in question.

For example, in your third thread, where Kira lifted a car and dropped it... even though her opponents were able to use earth via a dragonshard, Kira should still be able to sense exactly where they are on the Aether Flux with Aether Sense. Not having eyes on her target is not an impediment to a Kineticist. Something she could have done here would have been to not only Lift the car, she could have used Splintering to explode or implode the earthen wall that they had made (or force them up over the wall they had created with the same technique), dragged her victims out using Pull, and slammed the car back down on them with Push. That would have been a demonstration of four or five techniques that came together.

Please don't feel discouraged - magic, especially, is incredibly challenging to learn. This is as it should be. But the more you practice it, the more you familiarize yourself with it, the better you get. This is also as it should be. Keep writing, keep improving, and when you're ready, feel free to apply again.

Please don't hesitate to reach out if you have questions. That's what we're here for!

Kind regards,

Talisman

[Zora]

So none of the threads I submitted were valid and I need to do 3 more?

Also, do I need to post them here, or make a new request?

[Talisman]

I did not feel that the threads submitted were valid, no.

In the first two threads, there was a lack of detail with regards to how Kira interacts with and uses the Aether Flux.

In the third thread, there are two sentences mentioning it, when she was moving the car. I gave you an example of what would be a better way to showcase her skills with Kinetics with regards to this situation.

In the fourth thread, there was one paragraph mentioning the Aether Flux and how she is using it for the technique of Splintering, and like I said, this one came closest in terms to what I was looking for.

In the fifth thread, there was again a lack of detail involved with her sustaining and moving her own weight. Now, if she moved a car... and motorcycles... and flung them... she should have a reasonable understanding and capability of supporting her own weight, right?

You can post the links in this ticket, yes. I will keep an eye out.

[Zora]

here's three more threads with me trying my best to be detailed about the magic usage

viewtopic.php?t=5244
viewtopic.php?t=5245
viewtopic.php?t=5246

[Talisman]

Hi Kira,

Thank you for those three threads. I know putting a lot of focus on the techniques and mechanics can be tricksy sometimes, and I appreciate the effort that you went to here to describe Kira's interactions with the Aether Flux and how she worked with it to achieve her goals. Or, at least, not get killed.

Same thing, really!

Your Expert Kinetics is approved.

Happy writing!