NaNoWriMo 2023 Reward - Quirk

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Laveriel
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Title: The Dread Witch
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Hi there!

I would like to redeem my NaNo reward and I choose a bonus affliction quirk! Hopefully this is doable. Any suggestions are welcome. Thank you!

Threads That Bind
Creating threads that connect to their target’s aether is among the first skills that any afflictionist would learn - the foundation of everything else after. Generally, they are loose and weak, their purpose only to deliver afflictions before dissolving. This technique is designed to change that. Inspired by her experience of being bonded to an avialae, Veriel realized that preserving the connection her threads can make can be very useful.

The moment her thread makes contact with an individual’s aether, Veriel has to make the conscious decision to strengthen it. Unlike normal afflictionist threads, these will not simply disappear. Once the connection is established, the thread will be nearly impossible to undo unless by Veriel herself. Every thread will be different, considering it will change based on the affliction she uses to anchor it.

Her trick is not to plan a complex curse that would last years, but rather maintain a connection that latches onto the afflicted indefinitely to freely inflict whatever curses she wants at any time. In an emergency, this bypasses the need for a hastily made curse that will cause unspeakable curserot. With this, Veriel can simply throw a simpler jinx and bind the victim to her. Once she has the proper time and preparation for the intended affliction, then she can simply send it down the line of their connection without needing direct contact with the subject.

As she grows stronger, Veriel will be able to hold onto and manage more threads at the same time. If she only has one active connection, she will be able to maintain the connection indefinitely across vast distances. The more links there are, the faster they will deteriorate and end up breaking.
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Aegis
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I'm going to attempt a simplification rewrite of what you have here, with some adjustments, and then we'll see what you think.

Threads That Bind - This quirk is an upgraded variant of the Threading ability and is a minor curse in and of itself. The initial threading creates a minor, nearly imperceptible to all but the best Semblers or Afflictionists curse that draws on a tiny portion of the ambient aether in a being that often goes unused and unnoticed. This tiny drain empowers the Binding Thread, bridging a lasting connection between the cursed individual and Laveriel that will remain until Laveriel severs it, it is discovered by a being of equal power to Laveriel's affliction, or the individual is rendered entirely devoid of aether which is often death. This connection allows Laveriel to affect the cursed individual at her leisure, from a distance.

This weak, mild connection can span the entire world and across dimensions, however, the ability to send more curses along it does have an active range. If Laveriel and the bound target are outside of the range, any curses sent on the connection will fail and the aether will be lost. A successful curse sent across this connection will not cost any more aether than the curse would normally require.

At Mastery, she can maintain 4 bonds with a range of approximately a large city. At Master of Third Order, 6 bonds and a range of country. At Master of Second Order, 8 bonds and a range of a continent. At Grandmaster, 12 bonds and the known world and can transcend dimensions.
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Laveriel
Posts: 206
Joined: Thu Oct 29, 2020 6:55 am
Title: The Dread Witch
Character Sheet: viewtopic.php?t=936
Plot Notes: viewtopic.php?t=3186
Character Secrets: viewtopic.php?f=20&t=941

As we’ve discussed in discord, I’m good with this and changing the name to the Grudge! XD Thank you!!

The Grudge
This quirk is an upgraded variant of the Threading ability and is a minor curse in and of itself. The initial threading creates a minor, nearly imperceptible to all but the best Semblers or Afflictionists curse that draws on a tiny portion of the ambient aether in a being that often goes unused and unnoticed. This tiny drain empowers the Binding Thread, bridging a lasting connection between the cursed individual and Laveriel that will remain until Laveriel severs it, it is discovered and cleaved by a being of equal power to Laveriel's affliction, or the individual is rendered entirely devoid of aether which is often death. This connection allows Laveriel to affect the cursed individual at her leisure, from a distance.

This weak, mild connection can span the entire world and across dimensions, however, the ability to send more curses along it does have an active range. If Laveriel and the bound target are outside of the range, any curses sent on the connection will fail and the aether will be lost. A successful curse sent across this connection will not cost any more aether than the curse would normally require.

At Mastery, she can maintain 4 bonds with a range of approximately a large city. At Master of Third Order, 6 bonds and a range of a country. At Master of Second Order, 8 bonds and a range of a continent. At Grandmaster, 12 bonds and the known world and can transcend dimensions.
word count: 276
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Aegis
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This is approved and can be linked in your CS. I will add to your Secrets now.
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